Lacked
just seemed too short, you should have made it longer; also the story seemed a bit lacking so work on that and it should turn out ok :)
~DeIvL666~
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John is trying to escape from a lab, this is what happens after he steals a alien egg....
the thing on the black sticks back is the remains from the vine/bloody thing cut.
shorty
way to short
not funny... or cool....
make it longer! more violence! one more thing less crapy!
WTF?
Okay, that sucked. You made me expect something that wasn't gonna happen. Try again.
FINISH THE DAMN THING!
Plaguedsoul666 responds:
Thats what i was trying to do!
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Finsh it...