Animation in it was kind of choppy and the text was very simply made...
But since it's your first, I don't think I could do much better.
Overall, make it look more fancy and maybe better jokes and/or more sound clips.
It was your first submission? It is nice. The animation and not fluid but it got a nice story and few nice jokes. Keep it up!
Etecoons first shinespark... so cute...
so cool where did you get the idea from anyway
the story was pretty good :)