Nah...
Hmmm...let's get to the critiquing.
First off, no loading bar? That's the first no-no. It should be a rule for any flash work on the internet...a loading bar is a must! Without the loading bar, I didn't know how long it would have been before the flash was loaded, and honestly almost decided not to watch your submission. A good rule of thumb is to keep your audience in a constant state of interests. A loading bar is a must.
Second is the speed of the animation. Either it was the frame rate, or your particular style of flash creation, but this is an action based genre. It needs to keep me on the edge of my seat (or as close as possible) and be fast paced. The speed of the energy ball thing during Wario. The accumulation of enemies with Princess Daisy. Speaking of speeding things up, the fading in and fading out of the dialect was waaayyy too slow. You almost want it to "cut" to the next page of dialect. This is where I really lost interest and just held the spacebar down...not caring about the storyline.
Your graphics and sprites need a little bit of improvement as well. The images in the beginning moving across the screen...you know, the ones with a white background...yah, lets get rid of the white background. You could go alittle bit further too and recreate the sprites you used in flash, thus lowering the file size and having cleaner images. That would impress me.
Don't get me wrong, this was a still a good submission. But for your 18th submission here at Newgrounds, lets set your next goal a little higher...paying closer attention to details, and realizing that action based animations need speed and quickness.