A dump thread of stuff I've made for dramatic writing class

[treeese]

So I've been taking a dramatic writing class during my final semester of high school, and I've churned out a couple of works I'm at least marginally proud of, so this thread will serve as a sort of portfolio/showcase for all the stuff I've made in that class.

I'd love to get feedback on these pieces, as even though we have times in class specifically dedicated to giving feedback most of the people in my class are (as egotistical as it is to say) too easily distracted by the surface level quality of the story to notice any of its issues. I'm hoping that you guys, the fellas on Newgrounds, will be a bit more perceptive than my classmates and be able to tell me what to change (just please be nice with your constructive criticism as I am just naturally a pretty sensitive person when it comes to criticism and writing is particularly personal to me)

Alright, let's get this gravy train rollin'!

[treeese]

Oh dear, it appears I've already hit a snag.

My story is too long. Way too long. 18000+ characters too long. Which is ironic considering I actually had to cut 2/3 of this story to turn it in because I misread the instructions.

Well, shit. Here's what I'll do instead. Because I don't want to break the story into a bunch of chinks to help preserve the quality of the reading experience, I'm going to link to it on Google Docs. Anyone can read it, and anyone can comment. I'd prefer if you kept most criticism here on Newgrounds, but if you want to say something about a specific piece of text, use Google's commenting system.

Here's the link (go read it)

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/12Odo2DhjvwQaKwT5pzRFQjGLNwswqSpEmH3zWsOHhzg/edit?usp=sharing

[treeese]

Here's the link (go read it)
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https://docs.google.com/document/d/12Odo2DhjvwQaKwT5pzRFQjGLNwswqSpEmH3zWsOHhzg/edit?usp=sharing

Alternatively, if you just HAVE to read this on NG, then here's this news post I just made where you can read the story in its entirety on NG (I'd still recommend going to Docs, the formatting is much better): https://treeese.newgrounds.com/news/post/1165802

[treeese]

I'm done sitting on the second one, I finished novelizing it a couple of days ago and am finally deciding to post it.

Not as sharp as the last one, but it's still decent.

I'm just going to link to the Google Doc again. Anyone can read it, and anyone can comment. I'd prefer if you kept most criticism here on Newgrounds, but if you want to say something about a specific piece of text, use Google Docs' commenting system.

Here's the link (go read it)

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/17vs1gTEwOsOTGPCM_lgvNHA50OpjmipdrLqBm3efX8Q/edit?usp=sharing

[treeese]

At 5/7/21 05:56 PM, treeese wrote: I'm done sitting on the second one, I finished novelizing it a couple of days ago and am finally deciding to post it.

Not as sharp as the last one, but it's still decent.

I'm just going to link to the Google Doc again. Anyone can read it, and anyone can comment. I'd prefer if you kept most criticism here on Newgrounds, but if you want to say something about a specific piece of text, use Google Docs' commenting system.

Here's the link (go read it)
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https://docs.google.com/document/d/17vs1gTEwOsOTGPCM_lgvNHA50OpjmipdrLqBm3efX8Q/edit?usp=sharing

If you want to read it on NG, go here: https://treeese.newgrounds.com/