0:00: cosy intro, like it
0:30: cool chord structure, I'm digging it so far,
0:55: raw and linear. good, linear pace. sets a stern, direct mood. very good progression going on.
1:23: good rhythm with a good, adjacent synth fx. could sound crisp with a little more focus, light on the main rhythm synth.
1:51: great release, very mysterious, ominous.
2:05: very standard pace up progression section, a possible different note on the bassline (at possibly 2:12?) could help make a different, possibly more interesting approach to-
2:19: the breakdown. linear and slightly bland. though, the mood very well seems like what you'd want after that certain amount of time. personally, I'd experiment with really making this section shine, give many finicky, random approaches, but never too much of one thing, just a bit of sprinkle around for added mood flavour, if that makes sense.
2:47: this part is great on top of the previous one, though. no remarks, nice ✨
3:14: very dissonant in a mystical, yet interesting, cool way (you're really good at getting that psy-trance mood, you'd be an amazing psy-trance artist if you keep trying stuff like that, keep at it. ✨), the release of many sounds and rhythms here are a relaxing, relieving feeling, and well, I think you let people just relax here, and you do that really well. let your listeners bathe in comfort, only to be lead towards the eye of the storm coming after this section;
3:42: good landing spot for post-chorus listeners, really blanketing them in for the coming adventure,
4:10: this. thank you, just, thank you. ♥
4:38: you just get swirled right into a storm here, absolutely amazing.
4:52: I like how you just boldly try to increase the pitch here. personally though, I don't think it's working out in your favour, but that's obviously just my opinion, anyways - I have problems trying to get that to align well as well, so don't buzz out about that. maybe you like to try completely new approach. here you just try something stupid, scrap something, make something new, and every time you fail, just revert to a previous save, or make a new version save for that thing you just did, so you can listen and work on it another time.
5:06: this is an amazing section, love the phased lead, very clean, love it.
6:00: on the fucking minute man, that's awesome, man. very clean outro for an amazing journey. Well fucking done, man.

keep on doing what you're doing, you're showing great potential. ✨