The melodies sound a bit dissonant for me

I like the blissful mood at the beginning, but I think it’s a little hard to follow the contour of the melodies. They have a lot of large jumps in terms of pitch. The production quality is pretty strong, with well-balanced harmonies and a clean sound overall. The riser that starts at :32 (and also appears in some other places) strikes me as a bit bland, but I like the rhythmic bridge at :45. The melodies at the 1-minute mark really helped give the piece a sense of direction and catharsis, but I think you also needed a more structurally complete piece to fully capitalize on that. Overall, the mood, sound design, and mixing are all solid, but the composition could use some more fleshing out and attention to detail. Keep at it, DawMii! :)

Mixing, mastering, and balance
1.75/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
1/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
1.75/2
Instrumentation and sound design
1/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1.25/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.5/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
1/1
Composite score
8.25/10