Pretty good for a beginner! :)
What I would do is improve the mix of the drums especially (EQ, volume leveling). The sounds themselves also feel like they could be more glued all together.
Also you could think of some cool switch ups, maybe different sounds? :)
Keep up the good work and don't give up! :D
Thanks m8! Yes, I think my main problem now is that I am stuck on just one sound for fear that another will sound bad, I have to try new things even if that takes me much longer, thanks for the recommendations, I really appreciate it :)
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