I like the glitchy percussion at the beginning, but the kick at :14 sounds way too heavy and over-saturated in the mix. There aren’t a lot of moving notes in the texture at all, and the transition at :44 is very sudden. The section at :44 is catchy and pretty well-balanced (despite the kick), although there still aren’t a ton of mid and upper-range frequencies in the texture. The piece as a whole has very little melodic content, phrasing, or shape. Despite the coarseness of the texture, I like the murky bass at around 1:45. It has a really gritty, industrial vibe that, while still needing some cleaning up, definitely has potential. The mix is also pretty dry, with little use of reverb, delay effects, or other mixing tools that could keep the sound design refreshing as the piece grows more repetitive towards the end. I like the rhythmic components and instrumental palette to some extent, but I think you could’ve done a lot more with the composition here. It lacks a strong sense of direction and variety over time, and also needs more atmosphere to round out some of these crude samples. Still, nice work with the industrial feel, mood, rhythmic components, and (besides the choppy transitions) progression. Keep at it, NNmusic! :)

Mixing, mastering, and balance
1/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
.75/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
1/2
Instrumentation and sound design
.5/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.75/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
.75/1
Composite score
5.75/10