I like the frantic piano harmonies at the beginning and the energy here. I think a lot of the harmonies here sound really dissonant, starting with the line at :14, and the drums are a little haphazard and overwhelming at times. The texture feels really incoherent at times, and the progression takes a lot of sudden twists and turns, like the abrupt transition at :41. During the busier sections, the mix can also sound really muddy. I think you tried to do a little too much with this piece. I’d encourage you to try consolidating your compositional ideas a little more. Try working with only 3-4 percussion sounds at a time, and constructing harmonic riffs around a simple chord progression that only uses 5-6 pitches in total. That should give you a solid baseline of a harmonic framework. There are certainly moments here where you have a strong harmonic paradigm in place here, like from around :45 to 2:10, but otherwise there’s not a lot of cohesion in the harmonic patterns of these riffs. It can be hard to construct a meaningful harmonic progression if you don’t know a lot about music theory, but until you get a feel for how to keep the arrangement of you track cohesive and well-balanced, I’d recommend keeping things simpler. Originality is important in music, but I think it’ll be good for you to prioritize creating core harmonic motifs in the near future. Please PM me if you have any questions, or just want me to review some of your other work. :) Keep at it, BALDORF!

Mixing, mastering, and balance
1.25/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
.5/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
.25/2
Instrumentation and sound design
.5/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
.75/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.5/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
.25/1
Composite score
4/10

Ok, so there's a few things that bother me with this track.
First off are the drums; often times they sound random simply for the sake of randomness, which isn't really pleasant to listen to. I'd recommend at least keeping the kick and the snare relatively the same, since they're pretty much the anchor to your entire beat. The hats can be messed around with a lot more since they're less important to the rhythm of the track. Further, the drums take up a huge frequency space, causing the other instruments to take a back seat to them. Lastly, I think the drums have just a tad to much high end.
The second thing that bothers me are the melodies; they don't sound like they're staying in key (unless you're working with the chromatic scale, but that's rarely every used for melodic purposes). I'd suggest studying up on some music theory and trying to work with chords and the likes, as, just like the drums, the melodies sometimes seem to go random just for the sake of being random.
Lastly, I don't think the composition of the track justifies it being as long as it is, as there aren't a whole lot of new elements introduced throughout the track.

Overall, I can see the idea you were going for, but the execution lacks. Nothing a little practice can't fix though. Keep on trucking, and hit me up in a year or so to show me how you've improved!

Pretty good. The drums are drowning out the rest a tiny bit. Maybe EQ them a bit so they arn't hogging up all the frequencies but overall good ideas here!