well, it's a first try. i'd say it's some decent work. just 1) try to learn your own sound design (tip: FM synthesis and automations can go a long way) and 2) improve your mix and master skill. for this track in example, i would put less reverb on drums and make them louder + sidechain other sounds then put heavy compression and eq on the master. just some searches on yt and you can get a lot of knowledge yourself for free ;)