Overall I like the idea, as well as the olskool vibe I've always gotten from your pieces, but I have to say, the reverb is killing the clarity of this mix. Drop that wet signal, cut the low end, and...
Definitely lose the fade out with the clipped ending, unless this is intended to loop. That's a full half star for me because I know personally I only do this as a lazy way to end unfinished work. If you respond back it's a loop, I can probably have this review deleted and write up another one.
But yeah, that verb on your opening synth is insane and tin-can-y, on top of an already tin-can metallic synth. The low end on it is hanging around throughout, cluttering the mix. I would also recommend side-chaining your bass to that kick so your sub there doesn't have to push through a wall of low end, resulting in an unpleasant kind of throb rather than a strong pulse. If you're already doing this, increase the amount of side-chain and possibly decrease the kick volume. This sounded really out of balance to me throughout.
Otherwise, cute little tune. Enjoyed it. :)