loved the first 43 seconds of this. A great intro, but it lacked "punch" due to low volume. From there, it descended into a real lack of individual instrumental clarity. Also, it would have been great to see pauses wherein only the intro was replayed. The bones of this track are solid enough, but it really does need fleshing out in a number of ways.... it's a potential epic!
Keep up the good work. :)
The remix is awesome! :) I've upgraded this to 5 stars! Well done!