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Mermaid's Singing

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My latest track.

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I like the soothing, dreamy pads. You have a pretty good sense of harmony. The synth that starts fading in at :43 didn’t really fit the mood of the piece as I see it. I also don’t really understand the progression of this piece very much. A lot of instruments are added and subtracted frequently, but it doesn’t seem like it has an overarching sense of direction. The higher-pitched riff at 1:59 sounds like you were trying to make a it sound climactic, which is good. I just think you’re not entirely capitalizing on your ability to do that here. I’d encourage you to diversify the ways you create variety in your piece beyond just adding and subtracting instruments over time. Think about changing volume levels across phrases, finding subtle ways of changing up overused riffs, and using drum fills, sweeps, or crashes to smooth over transitions. The mix sounds pretty clean, although also dry. I’d suggest looking into mixing tools like reverb and compression that can make your instruments blend together better. But my main problem with the piece is that the composition is pretty underwhelming. In a sense, it feels like there’s a lot of variety, but the piece also doesn’t have a lot of shape, climactic moments, emotional heights, etc. Overall, I’d say that you have a solid foundation in harmony and instrumentation. You just need to work on creating progressions that are meaningful for the listener. Playing around with velocity settings is probably a good place to start. Part of it may also be that the harmonic elements of the piece are both minimalistic and repetitive. Hope this helped! Keep at it, man. I enjoyed your cute, quirky sound design and catchy beats. :)

Mixing, mastering, and balance
1.5/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
.5/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
1.25/2
Instrumentation and sound design
.75/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.5/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
.5/1
Composite score
6/10

I like what you did with the track, Though; it got really repetitive, there is more you can do with the track. Maybe try adding a bass line or more energetic melody? All I can say is that it was great for experimental and I hope you take your music career in a positive direction. 3 Stars, Solid! :D

Arkinefed responds:

Thanks for your review.

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Uploaded
Jun 24, 2018
9:40 AM EDT
Genre
Experimental
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2.6 MB
2 min 54 sec
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