Trapped away

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has a dark feel. part of the drums is supposed to be like a knocking from inside a box


wow, this is trippy

damn great input when the beat came in, I was expecting something of the like, but not as powerful and energic as that.

the start isn't directly happening, but at least it's not too slow. about a quarter of the song is a lil long for an intro though. Combination of synthesizement in the intro is interesting. the synth strings sound deep, and so does the seq bass you have, making it a lil deep and drowned. Therefore it was a good desicion having the saw in there quite quickly. The song in a whole is to energic for the start. I suggest you to add small, subtle and slow drum samples very sparingly, either a slow rhytmic hat each measure or so, or a ride cymbal with arythmic, jazzy hits. you get it or what? :) the note progression in the start is good, classic and not neccesarily eye catching, but that isn't what the song is about, as it's more of a slow steady tune.

the saw/square hybrid sounds ok, but I don't like the detuning on it. sounds like it's like 150 pitch bend measures too high. A very generic and not especially original choice which can easily be replaced with something else. It is good for a choice and doesn't crush the tune nor feeling.

you're right the drums may sound like in a box, but it's hard to know if you don't know that's what it is. If you mean the kick, then it's really vague, and the snare sounds much more like hitting a box (DnB snare). The digital toms could also sound like in a box, but it isn't closed (tight) enough.

I just remarked the gabber kick- it makes a good rhytm when you don't hear it, but just "feel" it, then it makes the song rythmic and catchy. but if it's too loud it's cheesy and annoying. In this case, it's a bit borderline.

The clap is very well placed, reasonable and does neither take away attention or getting drown. however the disortion took a little overhand and made it sound like a kick at times.

The end is reasonable, there's nothing wrong with it, so I'll stick with not commenting it. However if you watn to go to the proffesional class of music making you need to make something special for the end which suits the song, but sounds different from the other parts of the song. More meat on the bone rite.

overall this is a pretty damn good song, which needs some fixes and shapes up if you want to make it farther with it. at least that is my thought about it. err I mean my opinion. good work man

could I have a review or two back? I need more feedback on my latest songs :)

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2.50 / 5.00

May 1, 2007
7:39 PM EDT
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1.9 MB
2 min 7 sec

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