I like the intro with the chopped vocals and soulful piano. The pauses (:02, :08, etc.) made the flow a bit bumpy, though - if you're going to cut off the instruments like that, I would at least let the reverb bridge the gap to the next phrase. The sound design is cool, but I think you dragged out the build-up a little too long. I feel like it lost its momentum after a while. The chord at :54 also didn't fit very well into the texture IMO. The drop at :55 is pretty good, but I think you overdid the panning. The panning bounces around between my ears so much that it's a bit jarring. I really liked the breakdown section with the piano at 2:17, short-lived though it was. I think the haphazard panning is what bothers me the most about this track. Generally, it's a good idea to rely on equalization and compression for mixing and mastering, more so than panning. That said, I really like the chopped vocals, other sound design, and melodies. Keep at it, man. ;)