Music isn't a bad idea, but playing during a emotional scene kinda takes me out of it. also space the voices so we know you're switching roles and it flows. i'm sure you'll get better if you practice, also maybe invest in a better mic. It's not bad, but it will improve the quality tenfolds.
i was using i know my the program i used messed up the noise reduction
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