Pretty Good

Sounds like you used fruity loops to make it, just wondering if im right.
Now to the gnitty:
Originality: Definately a different sounding tune, and ive seen youve gone for some other worldly sounds, which can sometimes be hard to use.
Diversity: Multiple melodies are whirring around this track which impressively fit together. Also your range of instruments is impressive. However, i would have liked to hear a shifting drumline, rather than the same all through as youve created such a varying piece.
Clarity: Need some upper end EQ to make this a bit more lively man. Try top end - near top end. Some of the smaller sounds you have are swallowed by this lack of EQ.
Effort: You did try hard with this. I can see that, because of all the variants. However its that lil bit at the end that shows real determination, i.e. fix the drumline.
Nice piece here though, liking the melodies alot.
Safe