The frequencies on the bassline was kinda distracting. It was taking up the space of the other sounds which overall destroyed a bit of the cohesion you had going with it.
The lack of any variation within the melody also doesn't help.
This is an old music and I know that it isn't really good but I decided to upload it anyway.
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