The instruments are a little generic - I’d use 3xOsc and similar plugins sparingly if I were you. I like the progression and the beat at :23, though. The climax into :46 is pretty cool, but the 7-note melody with the nearly symmetrical contour is pretty underwhelming, and repeating it a bunch doesn’t do much for you here. I think you need stronger melodies here for sure - good melodies usually have a sense of direction to them, as well as a varied rhythm and not too many stepwise elements. One thing the piece is also missing is structural variety. You have the drum beat playing for almost the entire piece, and at some point I think you needed to vary the energy and dynamics by offering some kind of breakdown section. It’s not all bad though. The piece is pretty catchy, and you keep the texture nice and full throughout. The mixing is also pretty good. My main concerns are the lack of variety and melodic content and the instrumentation. Keep at it, man. ;)
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