Well at first. Nice concept. I liked the song.
You Sir did something, many people didn't got right. Even professional musicians.
You used an electric guitar in a Techno song and in a way it don't sound like shit.
This is great, keep that going!

Well after all the track is pretty neat, but it didn't felt like a "rising whirlwind" more like a light blow in spring/fall in the face but not like a whirlwind. Pretty calm for that. The ending is totally good, it's original I didn't heard those harsh endings for a long time and srsly for a great melody like that, I have to put this in my list when I play games. It's awesome!

4.5/5 Stars
You're great mate, keep the work going! :)

R4R

Yes:
Beginning is awesome! 0:14, especially, is really really nice!
Do I hear a key change? Yes, I do! Nice!
Drum design sounds great!
1:20 sounds really good!
Cool pluck synth at 2:02!

No:
This piece is really soft... Not sure what it is, but the waveform never quite gets to the peak I would have liked.
1:46 has clashing sounds, as mentioned below me.
The ending is really sudden. It was already said, but I'll reemphasize it.
0:52 doesn't really fit the texture of what came before it, and there's no real transition to smooth it out.
You have a key change, but you didn't pull if off in the most effective way possible.

Overall: 3.5 stars, rated 4 :) Keep it up!

I really enjoyed this!
Great buildup, every sound fits together nicely. I'd only change the ending, it's very abrupt.

1:46-1:58 The sounds kinda clashed. The guitar earlier sounded a little out of place. Besides that I thought it was a good mellow jam