I absolutly love it

Your intro was a bit long, but not like that's a bad thing. I personally think the distorted rhythm guitar part is rather catchy.

rawr

the writing is good.
the last guy mentioned turning up the distorted guitar.
but it sound like you scooped your mids out.
it would cut through better if you left in some mids.
crunchy is good, but crunchy and chunky is better :).

Freakin' Awesome

That was pretty darn good. The intro sounded sweet, and you wailed on the distorted portion. The only piece of criticism I had was to turn up the volume a bit on the distorted. Other than that, fantastic job. It's guitarists like you, make me wish you lived here. lol