You remind me of me when I first starting making audio! You have quite a few clashing sections, but individually the ideas are good, your only problem right now is presentation. I can hear you really like to add layers. This is my obsession, i'd like to invite you to listen to a few of my pieces sometime.
Anyways onto the song. An idea for future releases, pads. Pads are a great way to fill up "empty" feeling space, and serves as a great ambiant background sound as well as provide you with a foundation to set up any feelings or emotions you may want to convey into the piece.
The percussional beat is solid, but I find it cuts off too randomly, I also think the kick should be a tad louder.
I'm not sure if you already did this, but have you considered reverbing the claps? 90% of techno/trance artists reverb their claps like crazy, it really gives them a neat feel, you should try it, i'm sure you will be pleased by the results.
At the end, where you had that buildup leading to the breakdown, that part was really well done.
I can hear alot of talent in you, keep up the good fight and keep them coming! You will get there as long as you keep producing.
I would like to say the word good, but your not quite there yet but you gotta keep trying.
Hmmm...you're right, it didn't came out well, meh, I still can practice, I think this one is not the best one but I just have to keep it there.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.