You're getting really good ideas, you're just not translating them right. This is okay, but I do agree with Noe3. Maybe if you tried making a build-up with the organ tune, a little deeper bass, not so bright a synth around 1:18, you could even try making it more trumpet than synth if you want, and as for the triplet eighth notes, make them a bit deeper as well. Try extending the song too okay? WOuld you try those things please?