you really need to work on your flow and delivery man. It sounds like your asking questions when youre trying to deliver your punchlines. expand your vocabulary and ditch the basic and corny lines. The flow doesn't seem to match the beat either. Keep working though, most people don't even have the balls to post shit on here.
Thanks bro, I really do appreciate the input.
I've been working on my flow since uploading this and it has gotten better.
I'll be uploading some more content soon though.