Personally I feel like your structuring and mastering is superb, but just feel it's the choice of melody that lacks. A melody that just makes me feel like coming back to the track again and again. That is what is missing, just a feel-good factor. It's got quite an hypnotic repetitive drone to it, which is something the listen will either love, or hate.
Right from the start, I thought those sounds would evolve into something bigger and more immersive, but I didn't quite find the atmosphere you provided to be engaging, if scrambled across the entire composition. It's also pretty repetitive and this kind of repetition doesn't really offer much in terms of expression and potential, so in this case keeping things varied would have helped "elevating" those five minutes a little.
However, the main problem in this track is the somewhat sparse sense of melody and instrumentation. Both things are interesting to consider when the context is relatively darker, so you'd be emphasizing the feeling of mystery, chaos and disorientation, but here it just feels quite disorganized and what could have had a melodic/uplifting base is instead turned into a chaotic mess only faintly hinting at an actual melody. It's a shame because the mastering is probably the highlight of this track and there is a sense of structure permeating throughout the whole composition, but you need to find the right compromise between the sounds and focus your vision a little better.
Pretty damn good! :3
Thank you <3 this one really is more than a song to me
The structure is kinda chaotic......i like the percussion and the synths but the melody is all over the place. I don't know what to say other than that, even though the mixing is pretty good.
Thank you for your feedback! I'll take this into consideration next time.
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