well i think you just need to return some basics in chords. sounds like you got a certain them but the chords do not match. then maybe some articulation.
Why did you review this one? Check out "Euphoria I(redone)" before reviewing this. The other one sounds better.
It would have been good but...
I didn't hate it, but i couldn't listen to it all the way through. YOUR GUITAR WAS OUT OF TUNE!! :) I really like the song out of what I was picing together what was in tune, but it was like listening to a cat howl at the moon to the accordian player playing to the teacher scratching the chalk-board. (just re-do it tuned up and you're golden).
Nice Analogy. I thought it was pretty funny. But seriously, I appreciate your critisism. At least you told me what was wrong with it.