I love it!
-Melody is perfect
-instruments are great, chiptune is awesome!
-pan it! All of the instruments seem to needlessly crowd around the center. if you did even a quick pan job I guarantee it will sound a LOT better.
-I have no problems with the arrangement, in fact I love the tembo shifts, except for around 1:50. I was going to say just end it there, but I really like the end you have now and it would be a waste to delete it. A simple thing you could do to improve that section is to keep a hihat in there along with the instrument to signal to the listener that the song is still not entirely over.
Final Verdict: Lov it. 4 stars, if you fix these simple issues I have, it would be a 5 and a fav for me!
PS: This is a response to your R4R! If you'd like to see the song I want reviewed in exchange, it's called: [C] - Fallen Leaves.
Thank you for the response - it was an interesting track to produce, given the tempo shifts and overall style I did it, and I wasn't quite sure how to transition the sections... but I'm not sure why I didn't pan anything, I definitely should've.
Good title, the slowing-accelerating pace suggest an energy bar being restaured then depleted :)
This tracks has good story telling.
The pause at 1:19 is clever, it suggested me a game character/hero returning back to his duties for a while after 3/4 regen, but soon, he has to come back and regen again.
Nice variety of waveforms and melodies, crisp sounds, the drums are very well designed. The slides and snare rolls make a good job at transitionning from the intro to the different sections.
It's balanced volume wise and stereo wise, every instrument can be heard clearly, no apparent compression...
Maybe the slowdown time at the end is a little too long, or it would benefit some FX, bitcrushing, reverbs... (but i'm no chiptune expert, so i don't know if complex effects like that are "allowed")
Overall a simple but well crafted track that fit the genre well. I'm gonna go play some old games now :)
Thank you for the review - I personally like the outro as it is, and wanted to avoid using, as you said, complex effects (the only effect I'm using is a lowpass filter, and of course there's a small amount of EQing to mix everything together well)
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