What's up, brother?
First off, I must say that I had to play 'Terminal Turbulence' before playing your remixed version, just so I could get an idea of what the remix would sound like. I noticed that the timing was about the same as the original, and all you did was use the original and just added the knowledge you know now into it. I must say, I'm happy with the result.
At first, I heard it and I thought it was not good because it seemed too 'chaotic'. Also thought it was just a bunch of noise. But when I really paid attention to it, I thought the 'chaotic-ness' of it went well. Btw, it sounds like a "Robotnik" boss stage from the Sega Genesis Sonic days in a way. Nice job bro.