VAC 11 Judge Review:
The length of this piece I actually found appropriate for the story. Seems like you put a ton of work into both the acting and the plot. Very nice work! I laughed a couple of times and I was always interested in what was going to happen next. The mixing was great and the music and sound effects were all perfectly chosen and placed, really adding to the general mood of the piece. Your vocal range was quite good and what I’m most impressed by is the balance this story has. There was a clear beginning, middle, and end, though I don’t know if I completely understood the end hahahaha. My only real critique is that the vocals were too dry. I think they could have benefitted from some reverb to make it sound like they were in the same spooky space as the sound effects and whatnot. Otherwise, this was a really fantastic entry, one of the most entertaining on the list. Superb work!
Thank you kindly for the critique and compliments. Yeah, I should definitely take reverb into account whenever the story is in that kind of setting. I'm glad you enjoyed it overall.
I liked the characters but at first I was a bit confused might have been my "craptop" speakers listening on the go. I liked the plot and how the characters changed. A bit of sexual gratuity never hurt any one. I hear tons of energy in your voice and that is not necessarily a bad thing and you do funnel it well. When listening to it the second time I picked up on some hidden reference that blew by to quick the first time. I am happy that whinny Timmy gets his wish. The mixing was great and made you piece easy on the ears.
amazing voice acting but the woman voice was meh
Indeed. The woman's voice was my biggest regret when I finished this. It doesn't really suit my vocal range at all. I should have gone with a more husky woman's voice, but oh well. Thank you though for liking it for what it is.
This game sounds like fun. haha. Well I enjoyed this. You offered a lot of range and music and the sound effects were well chosen and well placed. I do admit there was a part in the beginning where the gap of differentiation between the characters had narrowed and I became slightly disoriented, but as I said you offered a lot of range otherwise.
As I could hear the sound of the environment of where you were recording such as a wall or other flat surfaces causing a slight reverberation it was hard for me to envision a graveyard. I felt perhaps more critter noises like owls, crickets, wind or the rustling of leaves may have helped paint a more thorough picture.
Other than that your script was very creative and FUNNY! I liked the part where you said, "wait, can I rephrase that!?" before turning to stone. Heheh. Anyway. Four stars! Lovely job.
Thanks a lot for the critique. I'm glad you enjoyed it for what it was.
Yeah, I can definitely concur with you in terms of the atmosphere. My recording equipment, as it stands, is only slightly professional. I wish I had some blankets or pillows to try and compensate for that reverb in the background. Then again, looking at my laptop screen as well as being covered with a blanket is a little chaotic. For some reason, I don't like the idea of printing my scripts. I don't know why, but I should probably change my habit of that for future references. Blast my tiny, crammed room. -_-
That, and I can concur with your suggestions for adding more background noises like owls. I added a few after I uploaded this, but sadly I didn't even think about adding more.
Thanks again for the critique. I wish I could fix up my recording issues, but hopefully I'll think of something to improve my mixing.
Nice job, fellow entrant! I enjoyed this. The voices were great, and the plot was interesting. And wow, it clocks in at exactly 6 minutes. xD Glad you made it in there. Good luck!
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