your characters don't feel too committed. the music worked really well. focus more on character work, i'd say.
They don't feel too committed, but you didn't explain on 'how' or 'why' (which is what I like to hear if someone is gonna shoot a critique). So that only feels like a weak stab at my work. So, elaborate.
VAC 11 Judge Review:
I was skeptical about this after reading your description, but this turned out to be one of the funniest entries I’ve heard. I started laughing almost instantly. There was quite a plethora of variation in voices and the mixing was very well done, though I have to say your voice booming quite louder than the music at the beginning surprised me, but it wasn’t too big of a deal. Although you tell me not to question the plot, I have to say that that’s my biggest question. This was really more of a voice demo, and I’ve heard some of your stuff before and they’ve been mostly voice demos as well. I would have liked to follow a real plot instead of listening to joke after joke after joke. Though the voices and the humor were outstanding, I really want to hear how you take control of your voices by sticking with a coherent dialogue. Anyways, this was quite good and I enjoyed it very much. Excellent work!
Ahaha well done. Great use of music, although I think you could have done more with the sound effects during the robot's story.
Honestly my biggest complaint is just that there's no real reason why this needs to be in a mental institution, and I think the inclusion of that detail ends up being a bit confusing; I kept thinking there was going to be some big reveal, like the Doctor would turn out to be just another patient who wanted something to masturbate to or something.
Great voices, great acting. The really important stuff you did perfectly.
HAHAHAH! That's actually a really good idea about the doctor being just one of the patients.. >P We'll have to revise this and have it animated one day. XD! Hey! It could happen!
I lost it at "beaking off."
Nice job, fellow entrant! I think the plot was a bit predictable and kind of...Well, you went right to the place that most people would go to, and it wasn't bad, but it was very straight forward. The voices were great, and they were varied pretty well. Good luck!
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