My issue with this track is the way the melody progresses. I found it to be unfocused and somewhat chaotic. The melody doesn't always have to follow a perfectly defined scale, but in this case, I just couldn't tell what the notes were trying to convey. The different instruments also seem off-scale in relation to each other in several parts.
I did like the instrument choice/mixing, though.
I had a feeling that was a problem I had. I find complex progression stimulating, but I realize it can get chaotic if I'm not really careful. Will definitely try to work on that. Thanks for the comment. I appreciate it a lot.