The HUGE fill effect at 0:20 is CRAZY, except it distorts a little.
I think you've got great melodic intuition, but the mastering needs some attention. A couple of effects are quite a bit too loud, so they distort and tend to take the listener out of the mood of the song. The fix is simple; just lower their volumes a little! :)
The only other thing is that almost everything is competing for low-mid frequency. You may want to low-pass the bass and really low effects around 60-80hz to bring out the kick, and lowpassing lead instruments around 121hz can really bring out the low frequencies without detracting very much at all from the lead!
I will rate this 5 and listen to it a LOT once it's mastered a little more cleanly!
Until then, 3.5. All melodic elements are excellent! Just gotta master a little :) I'd be excited to hear a final, touched up version!
Thanks for the review.
The sweep effect at 0:20 is quite a find. It doesn't distort only a little, but quite a lot. I've added some white noise fading in, and added a distortion effect, that increased over time.
Also I've added distortion on the vocals, the drums and several other instruments. Either you like it or you don't. I'm pretty sure that's where the distortion comes from you talk about. None of the instruments seem to be clipping.
Other than that I think you're right about the mixing. It could be better. But this isn't one of my most recent songs, and I remade, remixed and remastered it a little too often already. In the beginning I wanted to give it a clean sound. But that got boring very quickly. With each new mix I made it trashier. This is the final version with all its quirkiness. In fact I've come to like the flaws. Like I sometimes like bad effects in old films.
Instead of mixing this song again, I'd rather put my energy into new songs. I've learned a lot about mixing. I'll keep your tips in mind, but I can't guarantee I'll want to make my new mixes to sound clean all the time.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.