The adversity of Summer Storms and those brewing in your region now, should be something you can give yourself more inspiration towards a rendition of this track. I love the over-all feel of this piece in it's whole...but there is one thing that I would suggest looking into, and that would be the techno'y feel of this piece. You were going for something dark and deep, but in my honest opinion, you went for deep and hyped as it were, and this isn't a bad thing!
Basically, this piece of yours should be considered for a dramatic video of a chase scene or a hero being overpowered by the elements...
There is much MUCH potential in your music and your talent.
I would suggest you recreate this masterpiece with a deeper, darker feel with some acoustics, bass, and a lead guitarist reaching into the "depths of darkness" for the ambient dark required to go totally dark-side creep!
9/10 for you!
I look forward to hearing what else you have in store for us in the near future...
*followed + fav'd*