dont mind the KEY thats for nerds and techbitches like me ;)
like i said in PM, the chord gets repetitive after some time, even after 10 times listening.
it NEEDS like you already said some lead or pluck melody to keep it interesting.
i also noticed (didnt tell you in the PM) that your kick lacks something.
probably punch, and really tight compression. its a bit messy atm ;)
the hats can probably use a shaker aswell, such as a little more percussion.
id love to collab but yea, you know the story.