Nice intro, the bass is a nice touch to it as well. The intro melodies changing up a bit is really nice as well! But I think that it goes on for a little too long. Try adding some more instruments in there! If you don't want to change up the melody at all, try adding some more instruments to give it a fuller sound and to make somewhat of a build. And every once in a while you can go to a chorus. The song is very repetitive though and I can't really tell where a chorus is or anything since it all sounds the same.
The part at 1:10 sounds flat, but it's very interesting because it actually adds on to the tone of the piece. It compliments it very well for some reason. So that's good on your part that you are able to do that haha.
The only thing I can think of to make this better is to try changing up the melody a little bit, and adding some heavier drums. Add a snare drum and high hats and all of that. The bass drum loop gets a little old after a while. We want to hear something new! Something changing it up! I think the song has potential, but it has some ways to go. More melodies and more instruments!
Also, it'd be awesome if you could check out my original song "The Return" and give feedback!
4/5 star rating
Thanks for your opinion I may do a new version of this song to make it better when I got time.
I checkout your song "The Return" it was awesome :D