Well, from a technical standpoint it's excellent.
But it feels like it lacks Rhythm or Tone. It's a bit robotic sounding. Try playing with the levels, adding tension to specific notes, especially when repeating the same note multiple times.
This was before I was familiar with that. ;PIf I can find the flp I intend to redo this and possibly beg you to do some of that awesomenesstastic guitar work in it. owo
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.