Ok first, i wouldn't label this dance because of the beat. More like hip hop almost. 2nd, i would use something else instead of that detuned saw. I would maybe turn that trance saw an octave up but thats just me.
00:59 is a bit messy. I would maybe turn that the reverb or echo a bit. 1:25 that tranistion is good. You just need like a cymbal crash then it would feel a little more proper. Then 1:53 you have a bit too much again. I don't know how though you could fix this. Maybe lower the volume on some of the instruments? I don't know but it feels like everything is clashing.
In general though the melodies and instruments (minus that one detunred one) sound fantastic :D
Thanks for your review! This song will be going into an album, so all the criticism will be perfect for when I fix it up. Well this couldn't go into the hiphop section, I know its your opinion, but mine is that it's too electronic for hiphop. Sure, dance probably isn't the best selection, but neither were the other electronic genres... I wish there was a genre on here mainly for regular Electronic. Thanks again for your review and I'll keep you in mind when I fix all of the flaws.