I really like it, the melody is strong all the way through. I was skeptical at first about the start, but now I think it fits really well. The bit where the melody cuts out could use a bit of work, as if it was a carpet, that part would be fraying

I'm not a big fan of the percussion, However everything else sounds damn solid. I liked it over all. Personally I would make it a bit longer. You have nice melodies and a good mix, expand on it!