I saw what direction you were going with it but the sounds just didn't work to well for it. I can tell your new to Fl hearing this no offence. My advice for a DNB is more bass I didn't hear much. The point of DNB is to focus on bass and fast drumming. Try going at a tempo of 180-200 most DNB I have heard plays at that speed. Try some instruments like 3xOsc/DX7(try to make it square/analog dreamz/arp king. Dnc kick/vintage hihat/VT SD_3 and some stuff from FPC. I left my vote for this 4/5. If you don't mind plz review one of my songs Divine Radiation.
That's what I call a helpful Review!!!^^
Its kind of emotionless but i see its your first try and mine werent any better when i first started FL but youll get better im sure...
I hope so^^