This won't be easy...

I'm trying to write down some constructive criticism, but the fact that this is in fact just the beginning of the song is fucking my mind happily. I mean, i'd say that there's too few instruments, but obviously they are just holding back waiting for the chorus to kick in, so this one doesn't count. I can try to take on the vocals, but the singing itself sounds fitting to me, maybe one small complaint on the very lyrics about saying too often "I"(and thus, focusing the song on you, instead of the feeling itself. it gets, like, too personal?), but that's just a silly matter of personal taste..
So, to make it short (but that's already too late, damn!) I can't critique well for the early reason, so I can just look forward to hear what you're up with and give you an encouraging 8, to motivate you to unleash some sheer genius and let me raise it to a fully satisfying ten! It just needs a few extra 00mph... And I know you have them somewhere!!