It has a weak hook.
The bass is alright but the melody is really weak. It doesn't stick out very well and isnt too memorable. Plus the trance from the continuous paced beat doesn't take you in very well. You have a very definitive style that lends itself extremely well to your remixes. I haven't reviewed everything you've made but I find that your originals lack good memorable hooks. Its not easy to make good melodies though so just keep at it and you'll do better. Like I said, u have a very strong style to your remixes, its just that remixes already have good hooks because they're based on music that was already proven memorable and good.
I understand your point i'll try to do better nezt time.
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