But a little too cliché in my opinion. The fade in and fade out on the techno-dance melody is overused in my opinion. Your drums sound a bit too common too, when they arrive on 0:49. They are not badly constructed but i'm sure you could make something a bit more original.
About your melody, I'd change something. I think it is too choppy. Cause of the small silence that punctuate and the repetitions of notes it could seem that it's kind of "blocked", or has got difficulties to move on. And btw, try not to keep a single melody on the whole song. Cause even if you change the instrument, or play with the cut-off button (i don't know what you did), it's still the same melody.
About positive points, it's well structured ( i mean the different musical cells are well linked), and the drum transitions are well done.
3/5 and 5/10.
I made this a long time ago, I agree with everything you said. Most of my new stuff avoids repetition, so you can check those out and tell me what you think.