You pretty good at DnB.. maybe stick to that... some good drum and bass with some kickass drums, listen to ParagonX9's stuff.. and base yourself on that. :)
It was alright.
i didn't really get the title and it was a little dull after a while. i think with a little bit of work this could be a lot better. start by adding a few more parts especially more harmonics and non-standard percussion.
It's boring cause it's slow and agonising to listen too!