you wrote in your " author comment " that we need to place our opinions and tips here.
So here goes:
I would advice some kind of louder sound for the melody, something like a bleep sound maybe, I think it would fit here very well. Also I think there should be more " bass " at some points going through the track, altogether it was a nice melody.
So here is MY opinion dude, keep it up :)
Thank you! You are a living example of opinion giver! Very helpful, I didnt realize that myself!