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Intro definitely could use a bit more punch to it, it just sounds like you're saying "uh" over and over for no real reason instead of introducing the song. Either make the beat a little heavier or put a little more punch into the vocals, 'cause the start does you a little disservice.

The vocal level is fine and sinks into the texture nicely, but the rhythm goes off on a few places, especially at the 0:40-0:45 mark. Something about either the lyrics or the delivery is throwing you off a little because the pace does get kind of interrupted at times, so I think a look at one or maybe both could be useful just to keep that pace more even.

Generally, that's the party line of most of the track; you've got some good lyrics, from what I can make out, but sometimes the syllable count is enough to throw the pace off which is way too noticeable and brings the sound down a lot, so working on the vocal rhythm would definitely be a point of improvement. Apart from that, you've got a nice solid backing and pretty good structure, you just need to work on the vox rhythm to make it sound a little tighter. Keep it up, though.

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Needs some practice

-I chuckled a bit at the intro beat. If you listen to it closely it sounds like your getting hit or something. It didn't feel strong enough. Put more umph in it in my opinion.

-It didn't flow as well as it could of since the vocalized pace was quick at times and at other times it seemed like you were trying to remember lines and slowed down a little. Most likely from the complicated words involved. The amount of high syllable words contributed to slowing you down. This made you off of the beat just slightly but it's enough to weaken the song in general if it's off synch.

-The instrumentals were simple but you don't need anything too fancy for background music in a rap. The background beat would benefit from more bass though. It would give you a better pace marker to keep yourself at the same rythm throughout the whole thing.

-Just try to simplify things a little. It's a lot easier to spit out lyrics at an even pace if you use compact words and give yourself something to reassure the pace.

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