Nice!!

I liked the song, I'm hate Hip Hop, but this song was different from what I have in mind, you made a great beat, I like the piano in it, it sounded great, there was something new in the song, I never heard a Hip Hop song like this one, you made a great song. I just think you should find a singer, the song'd be way cooler, but, please, don't put that horrible Hip Hop lyrics...

I like the Hip Hop beat, I think it's something cool for a slow song, and it fitted really well to this song (a slow song). So, the instruments fitted really well to the main beat, what is great to the listener, since we feel something more, something better.

I just think the song got a bit too repetitive, also, I felt something was missing, but I don't know what it is. Anyways, you made a great job with this song, you really have a great potential, keep it up, man, I wanna listen more songs from you!

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Roger

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One thing I'd say from the AC...if you need a vocalist, go find one! :P There's a whole lot of people on NG who probably wouldn't mind helping you out as long as you give them credit for it. It's a lot easier to visualise a song with vox in it...when they're actually there! xD But anyway, onto the track:

The beat's nice and solid; the bass could have done with being a little louder, maybe a lot louder (because what it'splaying is nice), but it's not that big of a deal. Generally the first 49 seconds for me go without complaint...it's the entry of the violin sound that gives me a few gripes for the 15 seconds or so it's playing; the harmonies it does kind of clash at points and generally it seems to do more harm than good. Either look at making the harmony more consonant, or maybe just making the violin a little quieter, because its entry is a little abrupt, dynamically.

I like the breaks you have between all the instruments, back down to the cello and piano, adding the drum beat in again...although the material you have is relatively little, you generally use it pretty well to pretty much avoid the repetition you would have had with everything playing throughout.

The second time the violin comes in, I've warmed to it a little, but it still seems a little out of place, though I can't really work out why. One thing that did confuse me to start with was the entrance of the electric guitar because you had that and the violin playing together and it sounded a little messy. However, once the violin leaves the guitar sounds pretty cool, I like the how the violin kind of comes back in through it; I think there, as a point of transition, it really does work well. Has a few kinds in the melody, but there worked well as a structural device.

The ending was a little overdrawn with the fadeout, I think, but in general this was pretty unrepetitive for a song that's meant to have vocals in it. So...get some vocals in it, if you can. xD Look at the levels of the bass, 'cause it generally has a sweet line that you can't quite hear, look at the levels of the violin and maybe making that melody a little smoother, but in all it's a pretty solid track for a first go. Nicely done.

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Well

-Right now i'm just going to have to say do something about that title. No originality even if it is your first hip-hop song. Just make something up for a title that you feel fits it.

-The strongest thing you have going for this is the nice intro which is solid and has definition to it with the nice drum background. I think you were stretching yourself at the end though by trying to do too much with the song and ending up with a mess of instuments that clashed to me. Just try and rework it a little and get back to where you were at the beginning.

-It's a good thing I read the author comments or I would of downgraded you for the repetitiveness of the song. Lyrics would be a nice addition if you ever did get around to it. It's a solid background with just enough differentiation and kick to not feel dull and get drubbed out.

-Review Request Club

Pretty good.

Taking into account that this is a hiphop song:

Melody and Harmony: 4
The melody just isn't doing it for me. On the parts where the synthy violin comes in, it just doesn't match the chord, which I'm having trouble making sense of as it stands. I'm trying to figure out whether I'm hearing a i,ii,xi,ii chord (most likely) or a i, ii, xi, xii chord. As a result, it sounds kinda emotionless. I understand that lyrics are supposed to go on this song, and when I write rap beats, I think the same thing. However, you should reach for something more when writing beats. That's what separates the good producers from the rest.

Instruments: 8
Other than that cello that constantly plays F-E-F-C-E, the instruments all fit. Their melodies may have problems, but the instruments themselves are good where they are. That includes the drums.

Rhythm: 10
The rhythm is nice, and I like your control over the overall flow of the song. The drums flow well with the theme of the song. Good job man!

Variety-Unity: 9.4
Very balanced between the two. I don't think this is too repetitive at all, in fact, it sounds perfect for a rap beat. Once again, that cello hurt your score, but much less in this category.

Beginning and end: 8.5
I like the beginning, but the end is just a bit choppy. Too much going on during the fade-out, though some may disagree.

Mix-Master: 10
No issues here.

Dynamics: 9.5
That cello again. The lack of dynamic changes in its playing bothers me to no end, especially considering it plays for almost all the song. Everything else is good.

Overall, a 7.6/10. Nice mellow beat man, just improve the melody and you'll have an excellent beat on your hands.