Snowstormfir said it

Pretty much read his comment. I like it, once it got going the medley is excellent but the drum pattern and cymbals were merely ok. That "ding" sound is annoying and would improve the song if removed. The intro in my opinion is the worst part. Overall not a bad first attempt.

Nice!

Very nice :D

dude

you totally jsut blew my mind out my ass, wrapped it up and fed it to me lol (ive been waiting ti use that) anyway sick beats man! i fuckin love it

Hmm...

I don't like the start very much... It sounds raw and I don't like the repetitive ding, I would suggest removing that. Emphasis on suggest.

I think you should make the intro more interesting and full, along with the song. It has a flat feel, and I feel it needs more instruments. It seems like just a simple beat with an interesting tune, which may be what it is but I feel it should be more.

Also the echo on the cymbal at the end of the intro leaves something to be desired. I like the melodies offered and would wish that they be developed on, the bass channel is dull, and could also be built upon. The overall repetition is not bad, and I think it should actually be a bit more repetitive, as each section is altered and going back to the original tune would make a nice feel.

A new melody added would be nice as well, as the melody keeps to roughly the same line during the song.

The beaks between each section also could do with some improvement, the reverse cymbal is highly overused and a better bridge would add a tone of originality to a generically unoriginal genre.

I know this seems a very pessimistic review, but I feel this song could be improved on a lot, and it has a lot of potential idea wise, and in my opinion a good idea would be to start from scratch, keeping the melody and the ideas.

Overall, good idea, unflattering execution.

Please don't take this too harshly,
With a lot of work you could pull this off. :]

meh...

i dont really like house music but this ones ok and its frigging brillian since this is your first