Low quality mic needs fixing
Hmm ok this one clearly needs some work as it has alot of "LOW-QUALITY" sounding mic stuff its very "SCRATCHY" most likly its the mic either too close to the sound or a bad mic of sorts, so you could get a new mic for better quality and even play at a lower tone, but something should be done as this was just low quality, as for the song it sounds like a good song, i hear some guitar and piano and fast tone but again needs more quality, anyways hope your next one is much better, or even you update this one somehow.
~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Mic and low quality could change, the song sounded good but too much scratchyness, get a new mic or dont play so close to the mic.
sounded way to scattered at the beginning, but I gave it a chance and listened to the whole thing. I'm sorry but it didn't improve to my ears. It says there was organ in there but I could not hear it at all...Not to mention it didn't loop well :/ but hey I know how hard it is to make songs, so I don't grade to harshly.