Not bad...

Not a bad piece all round. Created a nice and creative background which was nicely overlayed by the main instruments. sadly, some notes were a bit dissonant. Drums did get a bit repetitive and background did not sound well with the melody in some parts. voices were slightly incomprehensibe.

Darklight17

P.S This is your judging review from NGADM Round 1. I posted it for ya just cos its always nice to have more reviews.

Repetitive, but pretty well done :)

I can't say I didn't enjoy listening to it, but I also can't say that it's perfect. It fits with the name a lot, but needs a little more work...

The melodies are OK. Pitch bending really fit well with this song, but one issue I'm having with this is that this is simply a bunch of random notes played here and there with a repetitive bass, a slightly monotonous pitch-bent instrument and repetitive drums as a background. What I'm trying to say is, this needs some fixed melody playing somewhere. I know this is ambient, but this could use some piano melodies instead of like 3 delayed notes playing at the end of some random bar in the song. Also, the pitch bent note got a bit repetitive, and that bass was the same for the whole song. I wish it had some changes here and there other than the same monotonous 3 notes it plays. As Blackhole12 said, this didn't have enough to it to keep it going for a whole 3 and a half minutes, so if you could work a little on adding some more melodies to this, that'd be great ;).

I really liked the instrument choice in this song. The piano sounded great, the square waves, the pitch-bent instrument, the bass, they all fit well with the theme that you were going for. Some high bells would add to the spacey feel this song has, and some low tubular bells would add to the other-worldly, creepy feel of the song, so basically, try and make the song more bell-ish :P. Nice use of vocal samples, they were timed pretty well in the song, but they were very hard to understand. Either you make them louder, remove the exaggerated amount of delay they have or both, since I sometimes wonder if they're words or not O_o. Also, this definitely needs some space-like sound effects as well, since sound effects are really important in ambient songs such as this.

The transitions are well done, but I suppose that's expected in Ambient songs. I liked how you introduced the drums at the beginning, with that automation shift, but I think that at 0:59, the drums changed automation a bit too suddenly. I think you should start a fade out of the drums at around 0:57 so that the transition wouldn't be so rough. I believe that's the only rough transition I found, good job. New instruments were introduced well, and there were some really nice buildups too.

The song structure is actually rather weird, TBH, and not too good. It was a repetitive background along with a random drum sample here and there and a few random notes. I think if you made a more solid structure it could sound a little better. Variety of the foreground was pretty good, but as I said before, the background needs a lot of variety. The intro was really well done, and the endign was OK. I would've preferred something a little better for an ending other than the fade out that you used, like make an ending note and a sound effect or something, but the fade out sort of fitted in this song, even though fade outs rarely fit in songs. Not a bad job on the intro and outro :).

The drums had good samples, and they were just the right volume. Sadly, they became very repetitive, just like the bass and pitch-bent instrument. As Blackhole12 said, the drums didn't change for almost the whole song, and since the drums are practically the only slightly fast-paced aspect to this song, I'm pretty sure it wouldn't hurt to add some more beats and more variety of drum samples. I liked the automation shifts on them, but that was almost the only variety that they had. Also, another weird thing was that at times you just introduced a new random sample here and there, for example at 2:14. That drum felt as if it came out of nowhere. Also there were some ride cymbals and stuff which were introduced randomly too, and that was a little weird...

It has its defects. I guess it's OK for an ambient song, but its main problem is its lack of variety, which is what put the score down quite a bit. Vary it a little more, fixing some of the stuff I mentioned above, and it'd be great. This song has potential, but potential is useless unless you use it.
7/10
4/5

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Creative, but lacking

This is an interesting ambient song with a fairly good landscape, but it's hurt by its dissonant notes that are thrown all over the place. The instrument choice is actually very well done, as is the basic idea, and the pitch bending is very creative. Unfortunately the piano notes are in a completely different key, which is just random, and there isn't enough stuff in the song to really keep it going for 3 whole minutes.

The production could use a bit of improvement, as well as the reverb, which is important in ambient songs like this. The drums are all mono except for a single isolated hat and a ride sample, which is really really weird. They also do not change for the entire duration of the song, and considering the significant part they play in the overall song, this is unacceptable. The vocals are slightly annoying because they're completely incomprehensible and seem random.

6/10
3/5

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I had OBE... it not a good asociation betwen music and OBE