I like it.
The writing is impressive; from beginning to end you stay on your topic. The lyrics are clever and I like the use of multis. Like Merc said, you could use a little more emotion and attitude in what you say, it sounds like you were reading these lyrics at some times, for example: "She STEEL ain't want u back?(pause)Aw what's the matter?". Clearly you didn't use any overdubs on this, so I gotta give ya props on that. Dubs could've added some more expression at parts; but of course you gotta master natural mic presence before you mix in extra vocals. I'm definitely digging the beat, MF Doom is elite.